Poor Imp

Moved . ...And I'm afraid I have no time for advice; but you ought to get some sooner or later - sooner, doubtless. ^_^ IMP

Feet. Er, hey, I can outrun both. -Tov Fist, I guess, if it comes down to that. -Piers -- Good form means...?

The Brothers Karamazov by Fyodor Dosotyevsky Is it just me, or has YWS gone on a little Russian craze lately, lol? :D The Brothers Karamazov by Fyodor Dosotyevsky Is it ...

Very lovely, very vivid, very soothing. Your lines are filled with words that blossomed into beautiful images. Your piece put me in a very tranquil borderline dream like state. But ...

Beauty -- Robin McKinley Strange, I've never read it. But I like it for nostalgia's sake - Beaty and the Beast was the only princess Disney film I ever liked ...

A what? Er, hey - an answer - of my choosing, right? You didn't say a good one. -Tov A human being, like I am - whatever the bloody hell ...

Anyone brazen enough to begin with a cliche has got to have something interesting to follow it, or redefine it. I got a keen impression of the place right-off; invariably ...

Lygarde de Mayne was a fun read, but I think you topped it here, CL. ^_^ The piece felt more neatly connected; and Lucie was a great addition. Michael will ...

Oy, so much more smooth than #2, and you've gone back to the deceptive poetic prose of the prologue. Though, unlike the prologue, you've no ideas clashing with action; and ...

'Firedrill! Firedrill! Firedrill!' shouted Tom, dashing like mad down the hall. 'It's not! It's real! It's -' A girl screamed. Then, to Tom's stunned astonishment, a deluge of screaming, shouting ...

Ha. Away from you, right? Or, er, honestly? Hey, I don't lie...always. -Tov -- Meep's Question...above

...You talking, right? Er, hell. Not that? -Tov If this is a joke, I don't have a bloody reason not to hit you. -Piers Yes, I think. But you can ...

To God. Naturally. Er, ha - serious question? Hey - I'm not stupid. First time you talk, leave a trail, right? -Tov God, to Teller, I suppose. If that didn't ...

No. Honest. Hey - really. Lying doesn't count - just a game, da? -Tov They're bloody bad enough without having to talk about them. -Piers -- Do you ever find ...

For an actual critique, rather than brief, off-the-cuff remarks. Though now that I've read through CL, Skye and Brad's comments, it seems sentence structure and syntax have, at least, mostly ...